Sunday, March 3, 2013

WeWriWa - from A Heart on Hold, book 1 of An Everlasting Heart series!

Where better to start than at the beginning? Join me in journeying back to the very start of A Heart on Hold, the novel that started it all!



The thought of war was removed from Charlotte's mind as she uncurled her legs from beneath her patched cotton dress and stretched them into the brook. She tilted her head back and closed her eyes as the icy water swirled over her bare feet. It felt good to have finally loosened the tight braid from her hair. She swayed back and forth, letting the way locks tickle her shoulders. Achilles, who had been grazing contentedly, whinnied at the light bugs that flickered about his muzzle. Charlotte's fingers found the soft jade and eggshell tassels that ringed her picnic blanket and her mind began to wander.

"It is coming you know," a voice from behind her stated matter-of-factly. "None of us will be able to hide much longer."


A Heart at Home, book 3 of An Everlasting Heart series
 

26 comments:

  1. What a lovely description. I felt as if I was right there with her with my feet in the water.

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    1. Thank you, Elaine! :-) Happy Sunday!

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  2. Love the imagery you've used in this snippet. Great job!

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    1. Thanks Jess! Revisiting this part of my debut novel makes me want to go find a river and dunk my feet in! Haha! Happy Sunday!

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  3. Beautifully done. She's trying to block out the coming war, and the gentleman (at least I think it's a man) behind her has to mention it. A lovely portrait of an idyllic dream about to be shattered.

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    1. Thank you, Kate! You hit the nail on the proverbial head ... an idyllic dream about to be irreparably shattered! Happy Sunday!

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  4. Love the way it starts off...

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    1. If only Charlotte knew what awaited her, she may have stayed by that creek!!! Ha! Thanks!!

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  5. A gorgeous moment interrupted by harsh reality. Awesome eight!

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    1. Thanks Charmaine! You are so right ... all heck is about to break loose ;-) Loved your 8 today, too!!

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  6. You have decscribed my home. Uh, almost. Lovely in every way, Gemma.

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    1. Hehe, was this for Sara (me) or Gemma ;-)

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  7. Oh, it was such a beautiful, relaxing scene and then you very effectively broke the mood and introduced the coming darkness - terrific snippet!

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    1. Thank you, Veronica, I am glad you enjoyed it!!

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  8. waiting for a war that is inevitable--as it was by that time.

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    1. A feeling across the ages, it seems. :-)

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  9. I loved all the details in this scene. It sounds like it's the calm before the storm.

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    1. Thank you, Carrie-Anne, you are so right!

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  10. You captured her deep in thought well. You can tell she was snuck up on. A peaceful afternoon broke by the reality of the man's comment. Good writing.

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    1. Stinkin' men! haha Always bringing reality to a peaceful meadow moment! Thank you for your comment!

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  11. Great description! Makes me want to know more! :D

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  12. You paint a very real image with your words, Sara. Beautiful!

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  13. What's coming?
    Nice hook!
    Nice 8.

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