Saturday, April 11, 2015

WeWriWa -April 12, 2015 - Missi Wanderin' in the Woods

Welcome back! Last week, a character I called Villa the Strangler swept by and it was pointed out to me that such an interestingly named character hadn't been properly introduced. I hope you enjoy this next eight-sentence snippet from my memoir, Missi Wanderin' in the Woods, as you brush shoulders with Villa the Strangler :-)
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I kicked my way through the ankle-tall grass, wishing I had an Italian version of an Audubon field guide so I could identify some of the interesting birds that flitted about. I’d already discovered ivy, growing unchecked, choking out an ancient grove of towering trees, but when I mentioned to my husband’s unit commander the need to get someone to cut down the troublesome vine, I was met with condescending smiles and smirks, laced with a general who cares attitude. I was seriously considering, in all of my pregnant glory, taking to the ivy myself with a pair of scissors when I noticed a twosome of Military Police officers, or MPs, walking down the street toward me. Abruptly, they turned up the covered walkway and almost sprinted into the clinic, passing me without so much as a glance.

Curious, I followed them. Had Villa, the friendly soldier who tried to strangle his pregnant wife in her sleep, freaked out on her right there in the clinic?

I squinted as I entered the dark building, unable to make out much of anything except for a flurry of excited chatter coming from every direction. Then, as the MPs slowed to a stop, everything started to come into focus. 


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11 comments:

  1. Oh my, what's going on in there? You really drew me in with this snippet!

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    1. Thanks Gemma! I can't wait to share it with you next week!!!

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  2. Beautiful story telling and you leave us with a what happens next question. Always good.

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    1. Thank you, Charmaine! I am glad you're enjoying the ride :-)

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  3. Your writing is just so real, it really draws the reader in. And it leaves the reader wanting MORE. Really great 8.

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  4. Lovely! You've really created a great sense of place here. And Villa the Strangler does sound like an intriguing character!

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  5. Wow! What a place to stop, Sara! Holy cow. Questions...

    Good 8!

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  6. I like the way the narrator notices all the details, like the ivy. I'm jst reading along, all happy, and then the scene takes a turn and then...uh oh! Can't wait for more! Great snippet...

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  7. Wow, Great visual! Very real. The pregnant aspect drew me in.

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  8. Nice cliffhanger. Makes me so curious.

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  9. definitely has me curious. the lead in and then its over

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