Wednesday, March 16, 2016

The Sonogram - March 20, 2016 - Missi Wanderin' in the Woods - WeWriWa

Welcome back for this Weekend Writing Warriors edition of Missi Wanderin' in the Woods. 
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We left off in the Italian Emergency Room, where we just learned Sara's (well, my) baby was still alive -- unlike what the Army doctors said. Adrenaline still surging, let's see what happened next. 




Before the words were out of the nurse's mouth, the doctor had the internal probe inserted and located the source of the problem. He spouted off a slew of musical Italian words and, though I didn’t understand what he said, I understood the soft tones of relief that colored them.


“The placenta is detaching,” she relayed, her eyes still on the screen. A fast little heartbeat 

 pounded in perfect rhythm from the speakers. “See the blood clot there? Your body tries to fix it, to save precious bambino.” 

The doctor rattled off something else and patted my naked thigh before disappearing.

Charlie stammered from the other side of the table. “Did um -- well, our -- did we cause this?”

“No," the nurse smiled, "but no more having the sex, okay?”


Researching some pictures to go along with this excerpt, I was glad to find this article

That horrific "birthing center" on the American military base in Vicenza has shuttered its doors. This was the establishment that gave me the advice to "let the miscarriage happen naturally" and that it was "God's will". 



20 comments:

  1. "no more having the sex, okay" -- I guess this isn't a romance, then?

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    1. Haha!! That sure spoils the romantic mood, doesn't it Ed? Thanks for stopping by!

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  2. Sara, so heartwarming and wonderful. No sex? That's okay until bambino grows enough to be born. Been there. Done that. Love to you and your.

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    1. Good morning Charmaine! Yes, that was by far the strangest pregnancy of my four! The bambino in question is curled up on the couch watching Tom and Jerry right now, as I blog <3 Love to you, my friend. Thank you for coming by to say hi <3

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  3. Awww, I'm taking a deep breath of relief here! I'm really invested in the story...excellent excerpt. Loved the description of the way the Italian doctor spoke and sounded to her.

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    1. Thank you Veronica! For stopping by and for your kind words <3 I remember it like it was yesterday -- the pictures of wolves torn out of magazines taped to the wood paneled walls. The desk that took up half the room piled high with messy books and papers. I'm so glad you're invested <3

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  4. Great descriptions. I'm glad they didn't cause the baby harm.
    Nice Snippet!

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  5. Very stressful situation, Sara. Especially not being able to understand the medics. Excellent snippet!

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    1. Thank you Kim <3 Yes, that was the scariest part.

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  6. A positive response from the doctor, but it doesn't sound like our heroine and the baby are out of the woods yet. I liked the phrase about the fast little heartbeat - a very effective way to make the baby come alive.

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    1. Thanks for stopping by, Peter. You are so right . . .more drama to come!

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  7. The dialogue made me chuckle...fun snippet.

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    1. Thanks T.M. <3 Sometimes remembering it makes me laugh too!

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  8. You sure have been through the mill, Sara! I like how you've written the broken English.

    It's such a crime--the shoddy services given to our military men and women--and their families.

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    1. Oh Teresa, all the experiences in that place could fill a book. Thanks for taking the time to stop by and comment <3

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  9. That doesn't sound great--not terrible, but not good, either.

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  10. Wow, to be in such a frightening position and broken English used to communicate. Hope all turns out okay.

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    1. Thanks Chelle!! Yes, frightening for sure! Like a whole other world.

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