Saturday, August 8, 2015

WeWriWa - August 8, 2015 - Missi Wanderin' in the Woods

Welcome back to this week's snippet from Missi. Last week, our characters feared a miscarriage. Find out what happened next. 

“I’m afraid I’ve lost our baby.” The cramping was enough to double me over and the onslaught of impending hysteria wasn’t helping. Charlie put me to bed and called the clinic on post. As luck would have it, we were at the beginning of a four-day weekend.
"I’m sure it’s just a simple miscarriage,” the nurse explained, nonchalant. It sounded as though she were sucking on a lollipop. “God does these things, let it happen naturally.” Then, she waited, letting her end of the line grow silent.

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18 comments:

  1. Gotta hate the nonchalance of the Nurse! Really!

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    1. Oh yes, and it gets worse!! We wound up filing complaints against MANY docs there before we left -- but on the other hand, had found some of the best doctors in that same clinic. This nurse was NOT one of them.

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  2. Heartbreak for you Sara. People don't get it. The baby is real to the mother and then gone. I lost two in birth. A nurse said well, you have two at home . Taking flowers home instead of what you expected is the worst. I still dream of them so many years later, my sons. Thank you for not being afraid to share your story.

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  3. Oh Charmaine, you totally understand. As usual <3 Thank you so much for following this story and for sharing part of your heart with me.

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  4. Gee, thanks a lot, nurse. It may be matter of fact to her, but not to the poor mother-to-be. A heart wrenching snippet.

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    1. Yes, it was a bad morning, but things will take a turn next week!

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  5. Ugh. Is it wrong that I want that nurse to choke on her lollipop? Any time I read or hear about miscarriage, I can't help but get weepy. I can't even begin to imagine how painful it is to lose a child, no matter what stage of life they're at. Really well written, Sara!

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    1. I wanted her to choke also, or shove it down her throat. The fact she couldn't comprehend that we were in an emergency confounded me the most. Thank you Evelyn <3

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  6. The nurse's attitude is exactly why I dislike the medical profession. Great snippet!

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    1. Yes Jess, she was very hard to stomach.

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  7. Great use of contrast to set the emotional tone and get the reader invested.

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  8. Wow...in retrospect, don't you want to find that nurse and explain to her that the medical profession isn't just about facts and figures...it's about humans and all of their wonderful, messy emotions. Some people...

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    1. YES!!! Her holier-than-thou attitude blew me away.

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